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How To Mend a Broken Heart
Published Jul 21, 2009


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Pinky-x-93

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Well This is my new story and I'm sorry about the half title at the beginning, it seems it is too long!

Anyway, I have managed to loose all of my people for my other story so I can't carry on!

I would really appreciate some feed back, too slow? Too short? Boring/predictable storyline? Whatever it is i would like to hear it!

Well that's enough from me, enjoy!

Well This is my new story and I'm sorry about the half title at the beginning, it seems it is too long!

Anyway, I have managed to loose all of my people for my other story so I can't carry on!

I would really appreciate some feed back, too slow? Too short? Boring/predictable storyline? Whatever it is i would like to hear it!

Well that's enough from me, enjoy!
“Hhhmmmmm” I let out an involuntary sigh. He was gorgeous. I’d had a crush on Thor Smith as long as I’d lived here (Which was only 2 months but it seemed like a long time to secretly like a guy!). I sighed again as I watched him choose the oranges he was going to buy, he really was dreamy. Now don’t get me wrong, I do not usually stalk guys while they do their groceries shopping, this was an exception. And technically I wasn’t stalking him. I didn’t know he would come today. I just happened to drive miles out of my way to the store I know he shops at, but everyone does that, don’t they?
“Ok, you’ve seen your Mr.Right. You’ve drooled over him. If your not going to do anything else then can we please leave? I’m so bored!” Ruby was my younger sister and my best friend. And yes I know that sounds sad, you couldn’t make friends with anyone else blah blah blah but we just clicked. She knew all my secrets as I know hers. We’d trust each other with our lives.
“you know I can’t talk to him! I would completely embaress myself!” I shot back at her. She was never one for patience.
“Whatever you say.” She replied. We shared a moment of angry silence then laughed. I could never stay angry with her for long!
“Right lets go then.” I said.
“Finally! We might actually be able to catch some sun by the pool if we hurry! We’ve wasted so much of the afternoon already!” She teased.
“Hey you can walk home if you carry on like that!” I replied laughing!
My sister and I live in a rather small but cosy house that I had designed and built. Yes we live together, I offered her a room while she tries to find a job and her own place. She is just out of university with a degree in fashion merchandising. And yes I’m an architect. I work at one of the big firms in the city. I love it! And the house that I live in was the result of a very lucky friendship with who is now manager of Build-your-own, the most successful building company in the world! I know people!
We got changed into our bikini’s (or a weirdo swimming costume in Ruby's case) and headed to the deck chairs out back.
“I Don’t know why you don’t just talk to him!” Ruby sprung on me as soon as we got outside. ” It doesn’t mean anything if you just talk!”
“ I know that, but I was never gifted with the ease you seem to emit when you talk to men. When I do it my brain decides to shrink to the size of a pea and all I can say is, I like your shoes. And I can’t really stay after that can I? Do I really want to embarrass myself more?”
“ I have an idea. We will prepare you with a conversation and then you will talk to him. Ok?”
I love my sister.
“Sounds good.” I replied. “When shall we start?”
“Tomorrow, because I want to catch up as much sun today as possible if I’m going to be coaching you.”
I childishly stuck my tongue out at her. Roll on tomorrow. That would be when I catch myself a nice tasty, drop dead gorgeous artist.
Will Darcie get her man? Find out in the next episode!!

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#1deebeJul 22, 2009

Good job! I read your intro you did for the story before this and this one is alot more catchy. It seems to be a little short to me, but I do wanna read the next part, I like this alot.  \:rah\:

#2kanzenJul 22, 2009

Short but catchy...cleverly written, but the screenies could be better ;3

#3genalicious2387Jul 22, 2009

its good so far \:rah\: just make the pic quality higher and the chapters abit more longer .

#4JillebethVIPJul 22, 2009

Enjoyed your story.  Good start, hope the next part comes soon.

#5madd4purpleJul 23, 2009

Nice story! I liked it a lot, it's a bit short, but I've tried my hand at a story on the exchange, and you run out of things to say in the 2 pictures you've taken! lol. Thor is a bit ugly in my opinion, but I've never like long-haired men. lol \:rah\:

#6samcactus101Jul 23, 2009

Nice prologue. try making a chapter/part longer. The pictures could improve but the storyline seems fine as long as its not so predictable as you said in the beginning. \:\)   3/5

#7anura32Aug 25, 2009

Good story line. The length of the story, well I was trying to have a story made up for the last few days and I know it is difficult. Just that come up with the part two soon. Love the story.

#8Sussie.MiaApr 6, 2010

Nice story! God start! \:\)

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